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[Fanfic] Drabble Challenge: Auron, Kinoc

Hm. This feels a little contrived and flat. I don't understand Kinoc very well and don't have his "voice" in my head. I may have to try again sometime. Anyway.

Title: High Ground
Final Fantasy X
Characters: Auron, Kinoc
Rating: G

Format: Crapass Drabble
Word Count: 418
Summary: Auron and Kinoc discuss why Auron wouldn't marry the high priest's daughter. Auron/Kinoc challenge drabble for dolevalan.



"She's a fine girl, Auron."

The broad-shouldered warrior ignored him, rolling up his sleeping mat and tucking it in a corner. He hoisted his sword and jug. "You marry her, then."

"I might." Kinoc grinned.

Auron snorted. "I'm sure you'd like to. Shortcut to power, Kinoc?"

"I don't understand you, my friend. Why wouldn't you marry her? She's young. She's pretty. She's wealthy. No more vows of celibacy to worry about, no skulking to the brothel hoping you won't be recognized--"

"Speak for yourself." Auron clipped the jug to his belt.

"You're kidding. Don't tell me you're--" Kinoc stared at him hard. "Is there something between you and Lord Braska, Auron?" He smiled too easily, too quickly. "Your secret's safe with me."

"Enjoy your promotion, Kinoc." Auron shook his head.

"That's it, isn't it!" Kinoc grinned and slapped his knee. "Well, good luck. Enjoy your pilgrimage."

Auron paused at the door, swung around, and set a blade to Kinoc's throat. "You won't marry the girl," he said curtly.

Kinoc's eyes bulged. "Auron!"

"You will also see to it that Edri is promoted to full captain. Understood?"

"The chocobo rider? But..."

"Do it. And give him the honors he earned at Djose. I don't care who his parents were, he saved an entire squadron. Promise me."

Kinoc goggled. "All right." He rubbed his neck with a grimace as the sword was removed. "Why in Spira are you worrying about that? I think your own disgrace would matter to you more than some lowly--"

"Because she loves him." Auron shook his head.

"Ah." Kinoc sobered, looking at his old friend with irritated respect for once again flaunting his monopoly of the moral high ground. "It won't be enough. Her father wants an advantageous match."

"It will be." Auron shrugged. "That boy is now the only one still left in the order who knows the exact location of the missing Fayth. That should be enough to win him at least a little renown. The rest is up to him."

Kinoc's eyes narrowed. "'Still left in the order,' eh? And when were you going to get around to divulging that little secret to your superiors?"

Auron smiled humorlessly. "You would never have heard of it if I did. Keep an eye on him, Kinoc. I expect to find Edri alive when I get back. Inconvenient warrior monks have a a way of disappearing on dangerous missions." He shook his head. "And you're right, Ginnem is a fine young woman."

 

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mneme_forgets
Jun. 8th, 2006 02:01 pm (UTC)
I like the way you make Auron a little flippant and bad-tempered in his youth. I can definitely see that.

I like the way that Kinoc assumes that Auron and everyone else for that matter is the same as him, but Auron disabuses him of that notion, or tries to. I like the way that Kinoc is the sort of bigot who can't understand celibacy or any other kind of temperance and so he quickly assumes that Auron is committing some other sort of sin.

I love the way that Kinos obnoxiously assumes that he is right.

I adore the way that Auron threatens Kinoc suddenly and unexpectedly.

I find it fascinating that it's the Lady Ginnem they are conversing over. I find myself conjecturing all sorts of things. Why did she become a summoner? Did she take this Edri with her too or did something happen to him? Was it Kinoc going back on his word that happened?

I think you did a wonderful job with Kinoc. I love the way you've made him so sly and insinuating. That is the way he behaves in the game really, like he's been Auron's best bud and so he has some kind of special insight into his character. The worst part is that maybe he gets it right? (Well, I'd like to think Auron's sort of got the hots for Braska - even if he is way to honourable to be in it for sex like Kinoc suggests).

Seriously, this is an awesome and deliciously awful Kinoc. And you write Auron exceedingly well too. I love his good humour about leaving, underlaid with a sudden anger. He may be behaving well about leaving the Warrior Monks, but it's rather put his temper on a short fuse I think.

Anyway, I enjoyed reading this. :)

Nitpicking:
"The broad-shoulder warrior ignored him, rolling up his sleeping mat and tucking it in a corner." Replace "broad-shoulder" with "broad-shouldered."
auronlu
Jun. 8th, 2006 03:34 pm (UTC)
Maybe this was better than I thought. Thanks for comments/corrections!

Braska -- I left it ambiguous, because I think the game leaves it a little ambiguous. I do think there's hints of... something... there. Anyway, Auron would certainly not tell Kinoc. ;)

Ginnem -- The random thought dancing around in the back of my mind is that Kinoc did indeed let Edri meet an unfortunate end at some point (possibly because of resentment towards Auron's favoring the young man, or just resentment at another fellow who's a better man than he is) after which Ginnem went on pilgrimage. Although more usually I like to write Ginnem as a priestess at Djose, because I like the idea that someone who grew up with Djose's somewhat prickly landscape would find Lulu a relaxing traveling companion. ;)
mneme_forgets
Jun. 8th, 2006 05:14 pm (UTC)
Oh I think you were completely right to leave it ambiguous, because Auron would never tell ANYONE about it.

Yes, I like the way you hinted at Ginnem's backstory like this. I like open-ended conclusions and I enjoyed this one for the possibilities it created.
muggy_mountain
Jun. 8th, 2006 07:09 pm (UTC)
You've caught them both nicely in this scene.

I like that Auron only reacts violently when Kinoc implies he has something for Braska. It's a very effective way of changing the subject, and really how people tend to argue when they know their weakness has been found. Well, realistic short of the whole sword bit, usually. Hah.

I can imagine Auron having something for Braska, but not admitting it to anyone, not even really himself.

And that bit of Ginnem connection seals the deal. Spira really is an incestuous world...Brother's role inf FFX-2 aside, even.

Very nice.
dolevalan
Jun. 8th, 2006 07:21 pm (UTC)
Hee. It's better than you think it is. I love how you caught Auron, and yet he's a little more hotheaded in his youth - I can definitely see that. And Kinoc's a jerk - I can completely see Auron thinking of this incident when he snarks "That Kinoc a maester?" in game.

Thank you! Yours is coming...once term stops eating my brain. ^__^
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