Here we go. About time.
Resurrection III, chapter X: Phoenix Dreams.
I have actually been fighting this chapter for weeks and weeks, since I wrote the original version immediately after I started the story, long before I ever reached Yojimbo's cave! The earliest version wasn't compatible with what I've written since -- I hadn't intended Auron and Lulu to be gone for hours and hours, and had assumed that Yuna would simply wait patiently til they got back -- but that no longer makes sense. I've been trying ever since to write something as solid as the much simpler "what kept you?" sequence I started with. This works.
I shall now do the dance of the gleeful author, because I managed to squeeze in most of the pretty phrases and snippets that have been generated in the course of all my rewrites, without making it look like a badly-put-together mosaic.
*Edit*
Bah, I should have stated it to start with. THANK YOU
trekqueen for telling me the original post I made for this chapter sucked. I'd been trying and trying and trying, and Saturday I uploaded a version I'd been struggling on for a while, but she said it didn't grab her, so I yanked it back down before many folks saw it. The next morning I woke up groggy and sleepy and wrote the Kilika sunset, sent her bits of the rest of this chapter for more feedback, and finally have something i'm happy with. Thank you beta!!!
Resurrection III, chapter X: Phoenix Dreams.
I have actually been fighting this chapter for weeks and weeks, since I wrote the original version immediately after I started the story, long before I ever reached Yojimbo's cave! The earliest version wasn't compatible with what I've written since -- I hadn't intended Auron and Lulu to be gone for hours and hours, and had assumed that Yuna would simply wait patiently til they got back -- but that no longer makes sense. I've been trying ever since to write something as solid as the much simpler "what kept you?" sequence I started with. This works.
I shall now do the dance of the gleeful author, because I managed to squeeze in most of the pretty phrases and snippets that have been generated in the course of all my rewrites, without making it look like a badly-put-together mosaic.
*Edit*
Bah, I should have stated it to start with. THANK YOU
trekqueen for telling me the original post I made for this chapter sucked. I'd been trying and trying and trying, and Saturday I uploaded a version I'd been struggling on for a while, but she said it didn't grab her, so I yanked it back down before many folks saw it. The next morning I woke up groggy and sleepy and wrote the Kilika sunset, sent her bits of the rest of this chapter for more feedback, and finally have something i'm happy with. Thank you beta!!!
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