Three things are bugging me.
1. Crusaders/warrior monks
"Crusaders" are capitalized, but "warrior monks" aren't. Capitalization is very consistent in FFX: summoners, maesters, aeons, fayth, pyreflies; Chamber of the Fayth; Four Maesters of Yevon. All of those adhere to the standard practice of treating a thing or vocational designation as a regular noun, but official organizations as a proper noun. I think that's why warrior monks are not capitalized; it's a term like engineers or sailors. Whereas The Crusaders are an official entity, like The Marines.
It drives me nuts, though. I write a sentence referring to the Crusader and warrior monk (Elma, Pacce), and it looks like I've screwed up.
2. 'Lai
Did I screw up? Does canon ever use 'Lai for Baralai's nickname? I have the feeling I need to go back through the last 10 chapters and replace Bar, but I'm not sure whether 'Lai is fanon or canon. I'm seeing it a lot in other writers' stories (to the point that it now sounds more natural to me, but I hate retconning.)
3. Baralai, I'm sorry!
He's one of my favorite characters, and I fear I've made him rather darker than he is in canon. He's such a sweet, noble, almost naive young man in canon. I had good reasons for tarnishing his squeaky-clean wholesomeness, but I feel bad about it.
Okay, if I'm going to spend tonight writing, I'd better WRITE.
Comments
Baralai is sneaky. Have you seen the sphere where he talks to Seymour after he and Gippal escape what happens on the Mi'ihen High Road?
It definitely colored my thinking. Very disturbing, considering that he seems like such an innocent soul. But Shuyin found some pocket of hate and despair in him deep enough to use him.
Also, I continue to be struck by this moment in game...
Yuna: "What are you planning to do?"
Baralai: "The only thing I can do:"
Baralai: "Keep those who would seek to harm Vegnagun away."
I once sat and twiddled my thumbs to see what would happen if you let him win. He'll kill Paine, Rikku and the High Summoner, then say, "Lady Yuna, forgive me."
It's game mechanics forcing a boss battle, but I think it's also right -- he'll do whatever it takes.
I find Baralai to have a very distinct dark side, myself. It's one of the things I find appealing about him.
Edited at 2010-03-23 07:34 am (UTC)
Also, wouldn't the warrior monks maybe have an official/unofficial proper name that they'd call themselves? If not in canon, then couldn't a fan make something up? =P
It just comes out a little awkwardly when I have one of each fighting side by side.
Edited at 2010-03-23 07:33 am (UTC)
Even if I love Baralai/Gippal fics where he's being adorable.
btw I thought I'd clarify on my post the other day, I was talking about the author being passive aggressive with her profile snark about you.